Character Writing: A Pain in The Butt!

Max is a tornado.

When he doesn't get his way all he does is hides under his covers and starts to whimper like a dog  out in the rain.  When we give him dinner he takes one look at his plate then straight away starts to cry. He hates losing, and eating yucky things especially his greens. He can’t even bike yet even on the soft grass. He is a scaredy cat and absolutely HATES getting told what to do.

Max’s teddies are everywhere! He’s got thousands and millions of them that he adores ,especially, his favourite Poo 1 and Poo 2. They're both fluffy poodles and we are not allowed to touch one. Every weekend he gives out notices with his messy handwriting, saying come to the party. Then brings his teddies and leaves them everywhere scattered through the house.  When he goes to bed and snuggles up with them well…… I am NOT going to get started there.

I think his favourite sayings are WAAAAAHHHH, OOOHHHHH, NO IT WASN’T,UUUMMM and WHY NOT.  One of the funniest things he has said is “hey Mum.”

“ What is it, Max,?”
“......... Nothing”.

One of the upsides of having such an annoying little brother is that he makes you laugh. By doing some not so smart things. I’ll tell you now  he definitely has a lot of humour. I do know that sometimes he can be a nice kind boy, but mostly, he’s just a little angry fire of rage leaving things  around the room.

He has blond hair, a small chubby face,  that is really smooth, and puppy dog eyes that look at you sadly. His voice is a loud squeaky little mouse, and when he whispers it’s just like me talking normally! He’s a small little kid and had just started school. People say that he is cute, but, behind the scenes, HE IS NOT!!!

When he gets home he turns on the T.V. and watches a dragon show. If we turn off the T.V. before the show has finished he gets really upset and does everything that we tell him to do a lot slower. After about 30 minutes he finally gets over it .When he comes home from school he does NOT tell us what he has done on the day, but, we find out soon enough.

Talk! Talk! Talk! Talk. Thats all he ever does, and when he does he blows your eardrums and talks back, annoyingly. His noise is unbearable and his voice is like a vacuum cleaner never stopping. It really is frustrating that he goes around the room and talks babbling on about stuff that's not relevant to anything especially when i’m doing my homework.

I know that he is young, but he is still really annoying.

So now you know about my little brother……. BE WARNED!!!!

Something that I have improved on is adding in more figures of speech.

I am really proud of the way I put my writing into ideas.